Reviews by AdamsGirl
PONDEROSA PACHYDERM by Patina Rated: Family Friendly [Reviews - 19]
Summary:

A What Happened Next For Old Sheba.


Categories: Comedy Characters: All
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4284 Read Count: 158
Published: 03/23/2008 Updated: 03/23/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Ponderosa Pachyderm Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed
OMG!!!  This was just too funny, Patina!  Imagine the townfolk thinking Sheba was a woman!  "Old Sheba" is one of my all-time favorite episodes---this was a great WHN or WHI!  Loved it!  Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, AdamsGirl!  I love this episode, too, and wish that the Cartwrights could have kept Sheba.  I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed this story!
Date: 09/18/2008
The Tattletale's Birthday by pony Rated: Family Friendly [Reviews - 32]
Summary:

Adam receives the best birthday gift ever ... from a very unlikely giver.


Categories: Drama Characters: All
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4001 Read Count: 311
Published: 04/07/2008 Updated: 04/07/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed
What a beautiful little story!  The love between the brothers just jumped off my computer screen!  You did a wonderful job, Pony!  Thank you!

Author's Response: Your review has made my day, AdamsGirl. That is exactly the feeling I hoped to inspire!
Date: 09/20/2008
With This Ring by Patina Rated: Family Friendly [Reviews - 24]
Summary: A short story about a wedding.
Categories: Drama, Prequel Characters: Adam Cartwright, Little Joe Cartwright
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1156 Read Count: 272
Published: 06/22/2008 Updated: 06/22/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: With This Ring Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed
Very, very clever, Patina!  I had no clue all the way to the end!  I just love your stories!  Thank you for sharing! 

Author's Response: Thank you, AdamsGirl!  I'm pleased to know that I "gotcha" with the ending.
Date: 09/11/2008
A Mouthful of Regret by Patina Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 57]
Summary: FeatureAdam's second round-up following his return home from college.  He and Joe aren't getting along but a brutal bear attack changes everything.
Categories: Drama, Prequel Characters: All
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 5746 Read Count: 897
Published: 07/16/2008 Updated: 07/16/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: A Mouthful of Regret Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed
A very powerful and well-written story, Patina!  Ben was so afraid and took that fear out on Joe---but I was glad that all ended well.  You've penned another hit!

Author's Response: Thank you, AdamsGirl!  Poor Joe was scared enough and then his father's anger was too much.  I'm glad to know you enjoyed this story!
Date: 09/16/2008
Summary: Adam meets a young lady from back east and romance ensues.
Categories: Romance Characters: Adam Cartwright, Ben Cartwright, Hop Sing, Hoss (Eric) Cartwright, Little Joe Cartwright, Sheriff Roy Coffee
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 45092 Read Count: 2617
Published: 07/16/2008 Updated: 07/16/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1- 4 Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed

Nicely done, swgirl!  I'm glad to see that you're writing fan fiction!  I look forward to reading your future works!  Thanks for sharing!

Date: 11/08/2009
Summary: This is the second story in the Battle of Wills series. During a family picnic at the lake, Adam gets in trouble adding poison ivy to Hoss' bouquet of widlflowers for Marie. After an argument with his father, Adam decides to leave home. A neighbor and old friend, Abe Garvey, shows Marie that there's more to education than reading, writing, and arithmetic while leading the search for Adam.
Categories: Drama, Prequel Characters: Adam Cartwright, Ben Cartwright, Hoss (Eric) Cartwright
Series: The Battle of Wills
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 5671 Read Count: 472
Published: 07/17/2008 Updated: 07/17/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Education is More Than Three Rs Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed
I felt so sorry for everyone!  Adam, confused and angry; Ben, frustrated; Marie, not knowing how to get through to that eldest boy; and Hoss, sweet little Hoss, just wanting everyone to get along.  Another wonderful story, Patina!  Bravo!!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, AdamsGirl!  Ben can't understand why Adam isn't happy to have a new mother while Hoss is overjoyed.  Marie suddenly became a mother to two strapping boys and had to figure out how to be a mother.  I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed this story!
Date: 09/17/2008
Summary: The third story in the Battle of Wills series. Men break into the house while Marie is home alone with Adam and Hoss. After observing his step-mother's actions when faced with the robbers, Adam calls Marie a name he once heard Jean de Marigny use. This incident leads to an argument between Ben and Marie about Adam's upbringing. And Adam finally realizes that Marie had been Jean's wife.
Categories: Drama, Prequel Characters: Adam Cartwright, Ben Cartwright, Hoss (Eric) Cartwright
Series: The Battle of Wills
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4962 Read Count: 301
Published: 07/17/2008 Updated: 07/17/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: The Shadow of Jean De Marigny Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed

I'm proud of Adam for wanting to apologize to Marie a second time---and it was his own decision to do so.  That tells me that his heart had softened just a bit towards his stepmother.  Acceptance may still be a ways off, but it's a start.  A great story, Patina!  Thank you!



Author's Response: Thank you so much, AdamsGirl!  Adam still resents Marie's intrusion into his life but is beginning to realize that his father loves her.  I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed this story!
Date: 09/20/2008
A Gift Horse by Patina Rated: G [Reviews - 35]
Summary: This is the fourth story in The Battle of Wills series. Ben announces at supper that he is going to buy a horse for Marie. Adam becomes unhappy because Ben had promised to buy him a horse before leaving for New Orleans. Will this situation cause another rift between Marie and Adam?
Categories: Drama, Prequel Characters: Adam Cartwright, Ben Cartwright, Hoss (Eric) Cartwright
Series: The Battle of Wills
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2452 Read Count: 420
Published: 07/17/2008 Updated: 02/06/2014 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: A Gift Horse Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed
Patina, I love this series---it's my favorite!  I read this story on another site awhile back, but enjoyed it just as much the second time around!  So glad that all worked out in the end of this chapter!  I'm going back to the library to read the other installments again!  Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work! 

Author's Response: Thank you so much, AdamsGirl!!!  I'm so pleased to know you're enjoying this series! 
Date: 09/14/2008
Remembering Childhoods by Patina Rated: Family Friendly [Reviews - 19]
Summary: This is the sixth story in the Battle of Wills series. It's the morning after the events in New Expectations. Ben's thoughts of the coming baby make him remember Adam's childhood and Hoss' early years
Categories: Drama, Prequel Characters: Adam Cartwright, Ben Cartwright, Hoss (Eric) Cartwright
Series: The Battle of Wills
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3081 Read Count: 296
Published: 07/17/2008 Updated: 07/17/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Remembering Childhoods Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed

Lovely story, Patina!  So glad that Adam stayed home and didn't go live with his grandfather!  ;-)

As always, very nicely done! 



Author's Response:

Thank you, AdamsGirl!  Adam may have thought he wanted to leave but he had to hear that he was needed at home.  Good thing Pa realized that's what his son needed to hear. :)  I'm pleased to know you enjoyed this story.

Date: 01/28/2009
A New Pattern by Patina Rated: PG [Reviews - 25]
Summary: This is the 8th story in the Battle of Wills series. The Cartwrights go into town so Marie can order baby furniture and Adam can get a haircut. Hoss goes shopping with Marie and, while in the store, he overhears her conversation with two elderly ladies about food cravings and whether the baby will be a boy or a girl. Which of course leads to questions.
Categories: Drama, Prequel Characters: Adam Cartwright, Ben Cartwright, Hoss (Eric) Cartwright
Series: The Battle of Wills
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3807 Read Count: 260
Published: 07/17/2008 Updated: 07/17/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: A New Pattern Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed
A delightful story!  From a little innocent inquisitive Hoss, to Marie's patience with his unending questions, to Adam being able to make the crib.  A sheer joy from beginning to end!  Thank you, Patina! 

Author's Response: Thank you, AdamsGirl!  Poor little Hoss believed what he heard and just had to find out if it was true (lol).  Adam is finally beginning to accept Marie and she's finding new ways to make room for herself in his heart.  I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed this story!
Date: 09/14/2008
Summary: This is the 9th story in the Battle of Wills series. The Cartwrights try to decide on a name for the coming baby.
Categories: Drama, Prequel Characters: Adam Cartwright, Ben Cartwright, Hoss (Eric) Cartwright
Series: The Battle of Wills
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2243 Read Count: 198
Published: 07/17/2008 Updated: 07/17/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Naming the Newest Cartwright Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed
Patina, this was terrific!  The buzz of excitement pending the arrival of a new baby was written very well!  I agree that a little girl would have been treated as a princess, but then we wouldn't have had Little Joe! (lol)  Another winner in this series!  Thank you so much for sharing!

Author's Response: Thank you, AdamsGirl!  Ben must have been so excited to know that he was going to be a father again and the boys must have been thrilled with the idea of a new sibling.  Thank goodness we got Little Joe instead of a daughter (lol).  I'm so pleased to know you've enjoyed this series!
Date: 09/17/2008
Summary: The 12th story in the Battle of Wills series. Hoss wants to learn how to be a good older brother to his new sibling.
Categories: Drama, Prequel Characters: Adam Cartwright, Ben Cartwright, Hoss (Eric) Cartwright
Series: The Battle of Wills
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2282 Read Count: 224
Published: 07/17/2008 Updated: 07/17/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Big Brother Lessons Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed

I can't imagine anyone being a better role model for Hoss than his big brother Adam!  Such a sweet little story, Patina!  Yes, indeed----Ben and Marie were truly blessed! 



Author's Response: Thank you, AdamsGirl!  Hoss wanted to be the best big brother he could be and he had a great teacher in Adam.  I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed this story!
Date: 09/17/2008
No Regrets by Patina Rated: G [Reviews - 18]
Summary: This is the 13th story in the Battle of Wills series. Marie writes a letter to her favorite aunt in New Orleans, describing her life on the Ponderosa.
Categories: Drama, Prequel Characters: Adam Cartwright, Ben Cartwright, Hoss (Eric) Cartwright
Series: The Battle of Wills
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2091 Read Count: 144
Published: 07/17/2008 Updated: 07/17/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: No Regrets Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed
Beautiful!  It seems to me that Marie was a much stronger woman than I had envisioned her to be, e.g. the gossip, etc.  But you've written her as a lovely wife and wonderful mother.  And I liked the bit when the conversation between Marie and Adam held no hostility (Bravo to Little Joe!)  Marie's life centered around her husband and sons---and her world was the Ponderosa.  How could she possibly have any regrets?  Well done! 

Author's Response:

Thank you, AdamsGirl!  Marie had to be a strong woman to cope with that old crone, Madame de Marigny, the loss of her child, and abandonment by her husband.  I'd like to think that Marie was not the bitter woman we saw in Marie, My Love but a "steel magnolia" who was able to flourish and bloom from the love given her by Ben, Adam, and Hoss.  I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed this story!

Date: 09/17/2008
Summary:

A What Happened Instead story for No Less A Man. The Virginia City Town Council convinces Adam and Ben that Roy Coffee is no longer capable of doing his job. When Adam explains the situation to Roy, the sheriff swears him in as a deputy and then quits his job. It's then up to Adam to protect Virginia City from the Wagner Gang. When the gang arrives in town to rob the bank, Adam is injured. Ben, Hoss, Joe, and Roy all feel guilt for what has happened to Adam while serving Virginia City's citizens.


Categories: What Happens Instead?, Drama Characters: All
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 10067 Read Count: 394
Published: 07/17/2008 Updated: 07/17/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: A Hatful of Guilt Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed

"No Less a Man" is one of my favorite Adam drama episodes, so I thoroughly enjoyed this story!  You write so well!  Thanks for sharing!



Author's Response:

Thank you, Adam'sGirl!  I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed my re-imagining of one of your favorite episodes.

Date: 11/08/2009
Summary: Joe makes a resolution to stay out of trouble. Hoss and Adam are determined to help him break it. How long can Joe last?
Categories: Comedy, Prequel Characters: All
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4105 Read Count: 316
Published: 07/17/2008 Updated: 07/17/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: A New Year, A New Resolution Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed

Another winning story, Patina!  I love the interactions amongst the brothers---just like they were on the series!  You write the family so well!  It wasn't difficult to imagine a very young Little Joe dressed in his mother's undergarments and reeking of perfume and cologne! (I bet that would have made an adorable and priceless picture! )

Patina, you have fast become my personal favorite fan fiction author!  Well done! 



Author's Response: Thank you very much, AdamsGirl!  I'm very pleased to know you feel I've captured the Cartwright family we know and love from the series.  Thank you so much for your support and encouragement!!!
Date: 09/18/2008
Summary: Ben has an important guest coming for supper. Can Ben babysit Little Joe and prepare for his guest?
Categories: Comedy, Prequel Characters: All
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3133 Read Count: 187
Published: 07/17/2008 Updated: 07/17/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: The Sweet Smell of Success Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed
An imaginative and delightful little story, Patina!  Even I found Little Joe to be exhausting!  (lol!)  Thank you for sharing!

Author's Response: Thank you, AdamsGirl!  I used my older niece as inspiration, so you can imagine how exhausted her parents, grandparents, and auntie were by the end of the day (lol).  I'm glad to know you enjoyed this story!
Date: 09/13/2008
Summary: Adam is injured when he and Little Joe are making fence repairs. Little Joe makes a bargain with God--if Adam recovers he won't be a spoiled brat anymore.
Categories: Drama, Prequel Characters: All
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 8255 Read Count: 387
Published: 07/17/2008 Updated: 07/17/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: I Won't Be Spoiled No More Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed

Another winning story, Patina!  No, I don't think Joe was spoiled.  Indulged, perhaps, but not spoiled.  Joe must have been in turmoil thinking he was the reason behind Adam's accident.  I loved the ending when Ben was spoon-feeding Adam.  A chance for a father to "baby" his grown son once again!  

 

Thank you for sharing this!



Author's Response:

Thank you, Adam'sGirl!  Ben had a lot of help from Adam and Hoss when it came to raising Joe and letting him enjoy the fun of childhood.  Glad you enjoyed Adam getting a little spoiling from Pa.  Thank you, again, for letting me know you enjoyed this story!

Date: 03/12/2009
Ducks in a Row by Patina Rated: G [Reviews - 27]
Summary: Two year old Hoss comes across some hatching ducklings. Will Pa let him keep his new friends?
Categories: Comedy, Prequel Characters: Adam Cartwright, Ben Cartwright, Hoss (Eric) Cartwright
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1851 Read Count: 180
Published: 07/17/2008 Updated: 07/17/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Ducks in a Row Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed
I can't imagine a sweeter sight than two-year-old Hoss being followed by eight baby ducklings!  What a precious little story, Patina!  I just loved it!  Thank you!

Author's Response: Thank you, AdamsGirl!  Hoss just wanted to play with the ducklings (lol).  I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed this story.
Date: 09/13/2008
Birthday Blues by Patina Rated: G [Reviews - 28]
Summary: Adam, away at college, is celebrating his first birthday away from his father and brothers.
Categories: Drama, Prequel Characters: Adam Cartwright
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1931 Read Count: 175
Published: 07/17/2008 Updated: 07/17/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Birthday Blues Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed
Wonderful job, Patina!  As always, very well written with so much emotion!  It sure pulled at my heart strings!  Another hit to add to my "favorite" collection! 

Author's Response: Thank you, AdamsGirl!  Adam should've known his grandfather could never blame his for his mother's death.  I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed this story!!
Date: 09/17/2008
Summary: At six years old, Hoss finds himself to be the middle child instead of the baby. Not quite old enough to be responsible but not quite young enough to be thought of as a baby anymore.
Categories: Drama, Prequel Characters: All
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2300 Read Count: 226
Published: 07/17/2008 Updated: 07/17/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Middle Child Syndrome Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed
Awwww!  I can't imagine anything cuter or sweeter than a six-year-old little Hoss!  There simply aren't enough stories written about our favorite middle son, so this was a complete joy from beginning to end!  Thank you so much, Patina!  I thoroughly enjoyed this! 

Author's Response: Thank you, AdamsGirl!  Poor Hoss just doesn't get as many stories as the other Cartwrights.  As a middle child, I can empathize with him.  I'm so pleased you enjoyed this story!
Date: 09/11/2008
Love is Blind by Cowgirl8 Rated: G [Reviews - 14]
Summary: Jenny Cartwright finds true love when she helps a blind man. I know it's a sorry summary... Part 1 in the "Jenny & David" series. CAUTION: Introduces two non-canon characters!
Categories: Drama, Romance Characters: All
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 25977 Read Count: 181
Published: 07/19/2008 Updated: 10/05/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Wait For Me Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed

Great start, Cowgirl8!  I love the idea of Ben having a daughter!  And I really like the character of Jenny!  I'm anxious to see what happens in the next installment!  Thanks for sharing!

Date: 04/29/2009
Summary: Adam is accidentally beamed on the starship Enterprise lead by the famous Captain Kirk
Categories: Action/Adventure, Future Characters: Adam Cartwright
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 9610 Read Count: 200
Published: 07/20/2008 Updated: 07/20/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed
Vive-Adam, I really enjoyed this story!  I've never seen an episode of "Star Trek" in it's entirety, but having Adam Cartwright aboard sure made it interesting and fun!  Thank you for sharing!
Date: 09/23/2008
Summary: This is a story that I wrote for my english class. My teacher really liked it. It's about the boy's while Ben is out of Town. There is foreshadowing. And we weren't supposed to have blood and Gore so nothing gruesome in this story. Any spelling or grammer errors are my fault.
Categories: Drama, Comedy Characters: All
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1452 Read Count: 152
Published: 08/29/2008 Updated: 08/29/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed
Nice story, Cowgirl!  I can see why your teacher enjoyed it!  What grade did you get for it?  Thanks for sharing! 

Author's Response: I haven't found out my frade yet....And Thank You!
Date: 09/11/2008
Summary: After a long day of repairing fences, Adam, Hoss, and Joe decide to spend the night by the lake and enjoy some popcorn.
Categories: Comedy Characters: Adam Cartwright, Hoss (Eric) Cartwright, Little Joe Cartwright
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1642 Read Count: 146
Published: 10/18/2008 Updated: 10/18/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Passing Time and Popping Corn Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed

A delightful little story, Patina!  You have captured the brothers so well!   Thank you for sharing!



Author's Response:

Thank you, AdamsGirl!  I'm so pleased to know you feel I've captured the characters of Adam, Hoss, and Joe.  Thanks again!!

Date: 03/12/2009
The Cartwrights of Camelot by Cinderella88 Rated: Family Friendly [Reviews - 22]
Summary: After reading King Arthur & the Knights of the Round Table, Joe has one crazy dream...
Categories: Action/Adventure Characters: All
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1147 Read Count: 105
Published: 11/09/2008 Updated: 11/09/2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: The Cartwrights of Camelot Reviewer: AdamsGirl Signed

A very creative story and wonderfully written!  I thoroughly enjoyed it from beginning to end!  Well done and thanks for sharing, cinderella88!

Date: 04/29/2009