What a great story the end was not what I was expecting. A quick pace story which was nice for the type of story it turned out to be. I loved the Hop sing dialoge really could imagine hop sing and Adam having the conversation which was in this story.
Just read this again. Read in 2012 and I see that I still got chills. I am glad Hop Sing was 'there' for Adam. Thanks for this scary story, Gillie
Author's Response: You're very welcome, lmc! Glad you enjoyed it the second time. Thanks for reviewing. :-)
Love this tender story.
I could picture Adam in the room so vividly. Hop Sing did have a special fondness for Adam and you captured it so beautifully.
Very well done...
Author's Response: Thanks, Tahoe Lee! Glad you enjoyed he story!
This is a wonderfully crafted story: spooky, yet showing the love of Hop Sing for the Cartwrights in such a touching way. I really enjoyed it.
Author's Response: Thanks for your review Cowgirl and for taking the time to read the story. I love the relationship that Hop Sing has with #1 Son and the whole Cartwright family! Glad you like the story.
Fabulous Gillie! Just loved every single word of it. Glad for our feature "The Reading Club" or I would never have caught this one.
Wonderfully written, sweet and touching story.
Author's Response: Glad you liked it, and thanks for your review! It was a fun story to write!
Well, I was definitely not expecting that ending. O.O Great story, Gillie!
Oh my goodness Gillie, I didn't expect that. Even in death Hop Sing looked out for the Cartwrights. Great story!!!
Wow -- ghost story with a happy ending. I love it. I always liked the Hop Sing character as he seemed to bring reality to bear or remind the others of the right thing to do.
Author's Response: I wanted to write a spooky Halloween story, as per bahj's assignment, and I didn't want to write anything too blood-curdling even tho' it was for Halloween. LOL. So I came up with what I hoped was eerie. Glad you liked the story! Thanks for reading and reviewing, Betty!
That was a wonderful story, Gillie! This Adam would've been in his 40s, and I can just picture him sitting in that red chair contemplating the mistakes he'd made with his life!
I love the surprise ending. Hop Sing is always right, even in death.
Author's Response: Thanks, Peg! I did conceive of Adam in his late forties, facing reality at a time when many folks run from their mistakes. And Hop Sing is always right and always there for his family. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
You created a wonderfully eerie atmosphere. A sad but good story and I enjoyed reading it
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked the story. I was aiming for "sad and eerie" at the same time! Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Fantastic use of the prompts, Gillie! This is an eerie little tale that makes me shiver. Sometimes bonds are never broken. Again, fantastic storytelling.
Author's Response: Thanks, Patina. Yes!!!! I think that bonds of love are never really broken. Thanks for your review, your feedback, and your help with posting in the library for the first time!
This story brought tears to my eyes. I don't like to think of any of them being gone!
Gillie, you wove a smooth story with no gaps or jolts in the plot - nicely done!
Author's Response: Thanks, Tracy. I hope the story was a mix of sadness over loss, and a bit hopeful about the connections that never die. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Author's Response: Thanks, SN! I am glad you enjoyed the story and that the ending was a surprise! Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Author's Response: I am glad you liked the story, JG! I was hoping for a mix of a feelings...sad, eerie, loving. Thanks for your encouraging review!
Author's Response: Relsie, glad you liked the story. I think we need to start a "I hate snakes" club. At least Adam put one out of commission! Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Author's Response: Thanks a lot, Bahj. I'm glad you liked it and that the surprise at the end worked for you. I was hoping that it would come across as eerie, but also sad and wistful. Thanks for your review and for hosting the whole thread!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it, Ping. Snakes are not my favorite things either. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
good story, thanks
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing, Bertha. I am glad you liked the story.
I've never been a snake fan and this story just confirms my distaste for them. You did a great job! I'm glad Hop Sing was involved. Thanks for sharing! I like what Ben says at the end.
Author's Response: Thanks, Paula! i appreciate you reading and reviewing. I'm discovering lots and lots of people don't like snakes.
Good job Gillie. That sent a few tingles down my spine!
Author's Response: Thanks, Jules! You tingled?? That's what I was hoping for. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Wow...that was intense. I hate snakes and have learned to control many of my fears but this one...Good job Gillie!
Author's Response: Thanks, Angel. A lot of people (I'm learning) really hate snakes. Glad you liked the story even with the snake. Thanks for commenting!
WOW!!! Great story Gillie. I got chills.
Author's Response: Thanks, lmc! I was hoping for some version of "chilly" as I wrote this. Glad you liked it and thanks for reviewing!
Gillie, thank you for this great story!
Author's Response: Aggie, thanks for your review!! I'm glad you liked it.
Oh my word that sent chills up and down my spine..Great job..You should write more..you're good.
Author's Response: Thanks, Muffin! Glad you liked it. And thanks for the encouragement. Much appreciated!
A ghost from the past to help a loved one. A good story, Gillie. But I didn't like the idea of the deaths of familiar characters.
Author's Response: I don't like deaths of familiar characters either, ant, most of the time. But the idea for this story just kinda happened, and I didn't fight it. I found out after I wrote the rough draft that Victor Sen Yung actually did die a hundred years to the day after the story takes place. Now that was spooky! Thanks for your comments.