I came to leave a review on another story and got hooked reading this one. :)
I enjoyed this. It's concise and emotionally intense. I think it was bold but ingenious not to mention the name of Adam's wife; somehow it kept the focus where it was meant to be: on the relationship.
I'm torn about whether Adam's actions are in character or not. On the one hand, I don't see him being willing to compromise his conscience--to lie, steal, or kill--even for another person. He's consistently willing to suffer, and even to make those he loves suffer, for the sake of doing the right thing. On the other hand, I think the emotional intensity he shows toward his wife in this story is spot-on. More than any of the other Cartwrights, I think Adam would love the right woman with his whole soul and an almost frightening passion.
The ending with Roy is just right. He sees...he remembers...and he understands.
Thank you for this story, Adamant.
Thank you for reviewing, I'm glad you enjoyed it but my early stories are a source of some embarrassment to me. Nevertheless, you are not the only one to feel that Adam would not behave this way. I think that Adam always does what HE thinks is the right thing and has no qualms about flouting rules or laws if he feels his aim is for the higher good. But he did intentionally mislead the posse away from Eden and allowed his friend in "Song in the Dark" to stay at the Ponderosa when he broke jail. Just two examples of Adam doing what he thinks is right at the time.
I appreciate your thoughts on this story (much appreciated) and my purpose in leaving that thread about writing reviews was not meant to shame "you" or anyone else, but to direct new(er) members to the thread explaining the review process in the Library. It can be intimidating.