Good story. Love Adam with a dog.
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Thank you for reading and letting me know you liked the story. (I love Adam with a dog, alone or any other way!!!)
Good story. Love Adam with a dog.
Thank you for reading and letting me know you liked the story. (I love Adam with a dog, alone or any other way!!!)
A good story, Adamant!
I really enjoy reading about an authoritative young Adam which was certainly the case here. I loved the way he took charge once he realized Ben needed help. Joe was much less sure of himself at a younger age, and Hoss was still happy to depend on his older brother's judgement. Ben was not at all happy about needing help from anyone. It works.
Also - I'm sure my eyes widened when I noted the mule deer in your story. Deer and injured shoulders... :) It's so interesting that we both thought about those things while composing a story. Both must be sure a sure sign of winter.
I've often wondered why the Ponderosa did not have a dog around more often. A pet would have been a good fit for the Cartwrights - even a working dog like Finn.
Nicely done.
Thank you, Sharry, for taking the time to read. I'm glad you feel the plot elements work. And from what I understand, your "Winter Tale" also contains the elementsnot only of a deer and an injured shoulder. I guess I'll have to read to see how these elements were incorporated into your story. And I feeel no dogs were regularly incorporated into the series is because they are trouble to work into episodes and maintain as a "character". Just look at The Brady Bunch and the old Patty Duke Show--their dog, Tiger, disappeared after a few episodes. But I am working on another story---which I may never finish--that has dogs, so they were on my mind.
Anyway, appreciate the review.
Trust Adam to figure everything out.
I really enjoyed this story. It fits with the canon, and certainly could happen. Plus, the writing is excellent.
I don't like Hop Sing's pidgin English, but that's a personal issue. Certainly it's how he spoke in the series, and his reactions are true to that character.
Well done - as usual, Adamant. You take care with your writing, and it shows.
Thanks for reading, Pt29646. I'm glad you enjoyed this story. I understand your view about Hop Sing's "English" and that's why I try to reproduce his grammar, not his pronunciation. No "Caltlight" or such things. The same with Hoss--no over-exaggerations of his pronunciations. Appreciate you took the time to leave a review (and the sweet compliment on my writing!)
Once I started reading this story, there is no stopping. The action and description of the landscape and animals kept me engaged. Hoss is panicked, and Joe, well, he has a lot of growing up to do. But Ben? No excuse whatsoever. Resourceful Adam comes to the rescue. Without giving anything away, the hound dog is a wonderful, colorful counterpoint to the guys. Well done!
Thanks for reading and leaving a review. Sorry it didn't qualify for the Reading Club badge but I hope it wasn't a waste of your time.
Enjoyed it. This would be a great one to extend. Always love the brothers younger - and grouchy younger Ben!
Thank you for reading, Marla, and glad you enjoyed the story. Appreciate the review.
Hmm, I was supposed to click on a story then go tell Jan the outcome but, I got to reading and that was it. Don't fret, I now just told Jan all OK.
Grand winter tale. Conditions for animal & human of the icy, freezing conditions made me glad I was sat infront of a blazing fire. The six characters are completely recognisable - i've including Finn in this figure for you've given the canine Cartwright traits and I've made the hound an honorary family member.
I'm glad the story caught your attention and you stayed a while. Yes, Finn is a lot like our dear Joseph--acts w/o thinking---but it's the nature of the beast. Thank you, ansi, for leaving a review and glad you're toasty warm while reading about ice and snow and Hoss' frozen parts. ;)
We have some snow out here today. So it's the perfect day to read this cute story. The contributors are aptly characterized: Hop Sing with his excitement; Ben refusing to admit weakness; Little Joe with his fear and insecurity; Hoss as a man of action, unfortunately sometimes unsuccessful. And then Adam comes and with just a few words and actions brings everything back into balance.
I think it's an interesting idea to put a loyal dog by Adam's side. I like the comparison he draws between himself and the dog.
The story was an extremely pleasant pastime. Thanks for that, Adamant!
Yes, a snowy day would give one the right mend-set to read this. As for the loyal dog, I am trying to write another story and dogs figure in that one, so I decided to give Adam a good hunting dog here. I'm glad you noticed the way Adam explains how he manages to keep check on his emotions; it is a matter of self-discipline--and that's hat he has to give to his animal.
I'm glad the story helped pass the time pleasantly, Thanks for reading and leaving your thoughts, Wing1610.
"A Good Dog" transports the reader to a realistic Ponderosa in winter. The few episodes shown taking place in a northern Nevada winter never fully stressed the difficulties of travel and distance, or the fear that came with those two problems.
Hoss is wonderful in this story, a sort of lesson under fire tale. Joe is, well, Joe - eager to do the right thing, but always easily distracted by his surroundings. Adam is, as always, sensible, with a touch of fear or concern lingering in the background of his dialogue and actions.
Hop Sing and Ben play a smaller role in this story, and they are both written believably.
Thank you, Adamant, for contributing a winter story to our library. Well done.
Thank you, Tracy, for taking the time to read and review. I had to use my imagination to describe what it might be like in a Nevada winter so I'm glad it was believable. I'm also glad you liked Hoss and the way he attempts to take on responsibility but he has a few years yet to go before he feels comfortable enough to make big decisions. I hope you found the story a good way to pass some time. Thanks again.