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Title: The Mills of the Gods Reviewer: Lisal Signed

What an ending - totatlly unexpected.   I love your summation of it, too - in the last paragraph.  A lesson in truth.  

The roughness of Adam in this is jolting but I like the edge.   I like him raw and gritty sometimes - even if it's not the way I always picture  or write him - it makes him interesting and subsequesntly, your stories are interesting, as well.   I like the suspense in this.  I like Adam's power and fearlessness amidst his guilt. 

The saloon scene was great - or actually, I loved all of his interactions with Billy.  The kid was afraid, rightly so and you write it well enough so I could feel it too.  I would not want to be on the bad side of Adam Cartwright.  I also enjoyed Hoss in this - being there for his brother while subtly trying to keep him in check. 

I have to admit the episode isn't exactly a favorite of mine but I do like this story .   It's a nicely-written, gritty, real-western read!   

Author's Response:

I've found viewers have varying opinions of the episode and of Adam becoming so involved with Ed Payson and all that entailed. Readers, as well, have varying opinions about how I write Adam (you're not alone!) I see him as intelligent and having the strength and determination to survive in the rough landscape of the west. That does make "Adam raw and gritty" but it's the various ways that FF writers portray Adam and the other C's that makes stories interesting. I know you're not the only reader who finds my version of Adam anti-thetical to the way they see him and I'm glad you pointed it out. lso, many readers don't care for the raw language but that's how men talked.

Yes, Hoss is Hoss, always trying to make peace and also attempting to urge Adam to ease up on many things. Hoss is invaluable and I enjoy writing the two brothers together. 

Billy was, of course, the antagonist in the story but found himself up against an enemy of his own making--he couldn't have it both ways and set himself up for what happens.

Thank you for your review and taking the time to read. And thank you for being honest. : )

Date: 08/09/2020 - 02:23 pm [Report This]
Title: The Mills of the Gods Reviewer: Tahoe Lee Signed

"Broken Ballad" was a great episode so I was eager to read more about it.

This story goes into depth and explores the deep and yet complex relationship Adam had with his friend, Ed Payson.

I'm touched by how much Adam wanted a friend in his life.  He was always generous and went the extra mile.  As with Ed, Adam was able to see the good in him while others could only see him as an outlaw.

Hoss is amazing.  He's solid and a voice of reason in the midst of uncertainty and emotional turmoil.

The scene in the saloon was great.

I laughed a few times as I was reading.  LOL.

Your story made me realize how guilty Adam felt.  I wonder if some of his anger toward Billy was really aimed at himself.

Their confrontation was riveting.

Passionate words lead to a thoughtful ending.

Well done!


Author's Response:

I appreciate that you took the time to read this story and review it as I struggled against a horrible case of writer's block!

I always felt that Adam must have suffered from guilt about what happened to Ed and be overwhelmed with grief at his loss. It seemed that throughout the series, Adam searched for friend who thought as he did, who appreciated him as much as he did them. I felt he identified with Ed and how isolated Ed was, hence his spending so much time with Ed, helping fix up the place and even after it was livable, helping Ed start up a ranch; they must have discussed being partners as Adam had a vested interest.

Glad you liked my interpretation of Hoss and the scene in the saloon. As for Adam and his guilt, he would feel that way (questioning why he wasn't stronger when it counted) but I didn't see his anger at Billy being self-loathing turned outward. I felt Adam would want justice for Ed because he saw it a cold-blooded murder. But when a man has a gun pointed at you... 

Thank you for your thoughtful comments regarding this story. And if you laughed out loud a few times, I'm glad! :-)

Date: 08/08/2020 - 02:34 pm [Report This]
Title: The Mills of the Gods Reviewer: ansinico Signed

Oh, my!  This in-depth look inside the head of Adam Cartwright.  The death/murder of Ed Payson exposing suppressed feelings which bring roaring to light of day pent-up anger, frustration and self-recrimination one would not have expected from the usual logic calculating Cartwright. 

How wonderfully you've painted big brother Hoss - the Cartwright anchor.  A perfect balance to his elder brother's rocky and at times fragile state of mind. 

Both Ben & Roy mostly unable to see rhyme nor reason and at times only adding to the fury beneath that hirsute Cartwright chest.

A powerful read indeed it is! And thoroughly enjoyable! And as Tracy mentioned, a read well worthy of a second run at.

I must confess to the shallowness of my thoughts ... your descriptions of a certain method of Adam's striving for cleanliness sent my pulse and heartbeat into overdrive. This for which I give thanks for at my age anything that pumps up the major, life-sustaining organ is only to be welcomed.   

Author's Response:

Well, ansi, a boy's gotta keep clean!

In the episode, I always felt that Adam recovered far too quickly from Ed's death and, in a manner, it was murder even though technically, it would be self-defense. I'm pleased you like the first person POV and my interpretation of Hoss. And as we all know, as far as Roy is concerned, what's legal and what's "fair and just" are often opposite.

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Date: 07/16/2020 - 10:33 am [Report This]
Title: The Mills of the Gods Reviewer: Pt29646 Signed

Another good story. I like the way you tied things up, and I've always thought each person is her/his own worst enemy. Billy certainly proved it. 

Author's Response:

You caught the theme of the story, that even though we may be there or have a hand in it, justice always prevails. Both Ed and Billy found it.

Date: 07/15/2020 - 11:35 pm [Report This]
Title: The Mills of the Gods Reviewer: Tracy Signed

"The Mills of the Gods" is a What Happened Next, a continuation of the Bonanza episode titled "Broken Ballad". 

Adam's struggle to cope with the loss of his friend, while at the same time, trying to come to terms with his percieved part in that friend's death, is both believable and and in character. Hoss appears from time to time, always stalwart in his advice, even when that advice is to allow Adam to think aloud.

This story, written for the summer 2020 challenge, is one I will read again, and I highly recommend for Bonanza fans, especially if you're a fan of the television episode.

Author's Response:

Thanks, Tracy, for the review and for the challenge. This was a hard one for me to write but I'm pleased it came out well. Thanks for recommending it.

Date: 07/14/2020 - 03:01 pm [Report This]
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