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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: janet0312 Signed

Interesting that this seaman from Ben's past came back to haunt him after so many years, his love for Elizabeth driving his madness to such great lengths. Could have been a little longer, I think. But I enjoyed it very much.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much, Janet.  

I have always supposed that Ben had quite a life as a seaman long before he became the patriarch of the Ponderosa.  I thought it might be fun to have a look back at just one of the possibilities.    

I haven't reread the story in awhile, but I may agree with you.  I struggled with how to end things without offering too much information to the reader. If you would have liked to have read more, that is gratifying to hear.  Thank you for telling me.  :)     

Date: 07/09/2020 - 01:44 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: cma Signed

Oh and one point. Why would Margaret be wearing earings? If they were a gift from George, I can understand but the reason wasn't obvious. Pioneer women did not dress themsleves up with earings very often. I think you need to expand upon that.

I also would have llked a tie-up between Hop Sing and Adam concerning the black panther.

 

As I said in my previous email, it's an excellent story. Thanks for posting it.



Author's Response:

While many women did not 'dress up' in those days, I made a small assumption that Margaret might have worn simple earrings as part of her every day attire.  I think it's a nice idea to assume any jewelry she wore was likely a gift from her husband although it was not a point that I chose to elaborate upon.  I didn't think it was important at the moment - not in my mind I guess.  I can, however, appreciate that you might have wanted to know more about that detail.   

I did consider a more lengthy tie-up of sorts between Hop Sing, Adam, and the symbolism of the black panther.  It is safe to say that I may have been a bit explained out at that point.  I don't think an additional tie-up between Adam and Hop Sing would have been at all unreasonable.  I simply chose a shorter route by allowing the panther, and all it represented, to quietly disappear, and for Adam and Hoss to remain safe in the aftermath.  However, Adam could have had indeed had a lot to talk to Hop Sing about once he was back home.  Perhaps I missed an opportunity there.  

Thank you for all of your feedback.  Thumbs up.  :)     


Date: 06/29/2020 - 06:05 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: cma Signed

Excellent. That's all I have to say.



Author's Response:

Thank you, cma.  :)  

Date: 06/29/2020 - 05:08 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Sierras Signed

This a page-turner of a story ~ intriguing with scary moments. I really like the family moments ~ especially the moments between the brothers. The Cartwrights are shown true to who they are, and that is very nice to see.



Author's Response:

Thank you, Sierras!  I've always thought the family moments were the core of what inspires all of us about them. 

I also like the Cartwrights the way they are - generous, kind, loving, and loyal.  It's what we all went back every week to see on television over and over again.  :)

 

 

Date: 06/28/2020 - 01:42 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Marla Fair Signed

Always happy to see a new story from you.  Thanks for the great read! 



Author's Response:

Marla!  It's always nice to hear from you!

Thank you for your input.  As you and I have often discussed, I never know quite where the story will take me.  :)     

 

 

 

 

Date: 06/27/2020 - 11:15 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Tahoe Lee Signed

A very unique story with some psychological twists and turns.

You know how to build intrigue very well.  I won't give anything away except to say your ‘new' character is fascinating.  What a plot!

I love your transitions, especially the ending of chapter 3. Awesome.

Great description concerning the eyes when Adam didn't look away from him in chapter 7.  Nice.

You did a great job with this story.  I couldn't put it down. 

 



Author's Response:

Hi, Tahoe Lee.  I'm so appreciative of your input!  It's always nice to hear from you.

I am pleased to know that you felt some sort of intrigue from this story as I wasn't sure where it was going for awhile.  As is often the case, it was a bit of a wild ride.  #Don'tKnowHowElseToDoIt  :)   

I always thought Adam had the most expressive eyes.  (Among other things.)  It would be a shame to waste them, right? 

I think one of the best things about the Cartwright men as characters is that they can virtually write themselves.  They are all such strong, exemplary figures.  If we're talking about the Cartwrights, there's a whole lot to work with.     

Thank you again!  I'm glad you liked it.     

  


Date: 06/22/2020 - 07:27 pm [Report This]
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