Oh and one point. Why would Margaret be wearing earings? If they were a gift from George, I can understand but the reason wasn't obvious. Pioneer women did not dress themsleves up with earings very often. I think you need to expand upon that.
I also would have llked a tie-up between Hop Sing and Adam concerning the black panther.
As I said in my previous email, it's an excellent story. Thanks for posting it.Author's Response:
While many women did not 'dress up' in those days, I made a small assumption that Margaret might have worn simple earrings as part of her every day attire. I think it's a nice idea to assume any jewelry she wore was likely a gift from her husband although it was not a point that I chose to elaborate upon. I didn't think it was important at the moment - not in my mind I guess. I can, however, appreciate that you might have wanted to know more about that detail.
I did consider a more lengthy tie-up of sorts between Hop Sing, Adam, and the symbolism of the black panther. It is safe to say that I may have been a bit explained out at that point. I don't think an additional tie-up between Adam and Hop Sing would have been at all unreasonable. I simply chose a shorter route by allowing the panther, and all it represented, to quietly disappear, and for Adam and Hoss to remain safe in the aftermath. However, Adam could have had indeed had a lot to talk to Hop Sing about once he was back home. Perhaps I missed an opportunity there.
Thank you for all of your feedback. Thumbs up. :)