Reviews For Moving On
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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Tahoe Lee Signed

A sad story of loss. 

You did a good job of blending memories of the past into the current situation to bring hope.

 

Date: 06/08/2020 - 08:30 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Sierras Signed

This is a touching and poignant story. Very nice JAM and JPM moments.



Author's Response:

Sierras, Thank you for letting me know you read my story and that you liked it.

Date: 06/03/2020 - 01:06 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Tracy Signed

Moving On is a touching story of passage, remembrance, and caring. 

The story is written with balance between dsecription and dialogue, and the characters, though young, are true to canon.



Author's Response:

Tracy, Thank you for your review and for reading my short story.  And for hosting the Spring Challenge.

Date: 06/01/2020 - 09:54 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: adamant Signed

An interesting story about when to let go of loved ones. Although I'm not ovely familiar with your stlye, I couldn't help but notice the abundance of short, choppy sentences. Wondered if they were for any particluar purpose regarding this story.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading my story and commenting.  I made a few edits after considering your observation of the choppy sentences, and agreed.  I think it reads more smoothly now.

Date: 05/30/2020 - 12:55 pm [Report This]
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