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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: chezza Signed

As someone who has lived through many blizzards, I appreciated your vivid description of this force of nature. Very entertaining character development paired with a naturally unfolding mystery that is never completely solved. Really enjoyed reading this. Thanks Elizabeth.



Author's Response:

chezza, thank you for reading my story and leaving a review.  Like you, I know a lot about snow storms, and each one is different.   I'm glad you enjoyed reading the story.  That makes it worth while.

Date: 01/17/2020 - 05:46 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Lisal Signed

Well, I planned on reading this in two sittings but I couldn't stop.  This story was wonderful.  

Firstly, I not only love your portrayal of Sam, I love his voice - his witty metaphors "not a port for her high-flying clippers", his wisdom, "barkeeping is an education in gestures and expressions", his forthright speech ie. "I don't trust you,:  and his carmudgeonly love and concern for everything.  Delia's letters were absolutely hilarious.  I want to go back and re-read them right now.  What a character!  And your descriptions of the snowstorm brought the setting to life... I also want to mention here that Adam in his 3-day beard sounds mm, mmm, good.  

You've got the perfect ratio of dialogue and exposition, elizabeth and you really know how to build suspense.  I love the ending and there are a few other things I would mention, too, but I don't want to give our spoilers.  It's just a very, very, good story. 

Thank you for Beale's little mare and for seeing Sam's horses and cow in out of the snow.  



Author's Response:

Lisal,  Thank you for your very kind review and for pointing out what you especially liked about the story.  I highly recommend taking one of the mainstay lesser characters of Bonanza and writing a story.  The canvas is blank with maybe a little information.  With Sam, it simply was his occupation and of course his physical appearance and way of being.  It is an amazing experience.  Someone else would write an entirely different story about Sam, which would be wonderful to read and compare notes.

Date: 01/17/2020 - 04:39 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Tracy Signed

Althugh this is a story that leads the reader toward the Cartwrights, its really about a "secondary" character in the series, a mainstay in the ficticious version of Virginia City.

The author has given life-beyond-the-bar to a familiar character as he tells the story, chats with us, if you will, as he would a paying customer. But this time, he's on the other side of the conversation. 

An interesting, well written story.



Author's Response:

Tracy,  Thank you for reading my story and leaving a review.  I hadn't thought of the reader as someone standing across from Sam at his bar, listening to him talk.  But that is exactly who Sam is talking to.  Thank you for expanding my understanding of the story.

Date: 01/13/2020 - 11:48 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Tahoe Lee Signed

I enjoyed this story very much.  This is very well thought out.  From the beginning to how you introduced Adam and the sheriff. 

Also, we get another dimension to the story with the POV you used.  I thought it was interesting and unique.

The sub-story concerning the Cartwrights was quite intriguing as well. 

I really liked your description of the weather and the bitter cold.  It was almost another character in the story.  You did this well!  Kudos    



Author's Response:

Tahoe Lee, Thank you for reading my story and for leaving the review.  Most helpful.  At first, Adam was not part of the story.  Once he had made his way in, the ideas flowed naturally.  Simon did not want to die, and so I needed to tell some of his story, but not all  in this short piece.  Yes, every storm has its own character, each one is different.

Date: 01/12/2020 - 02:31 pm [Report This]
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