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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Elizabeth Holmes Signed

Ansi, I love your story with the earthy conversation between the Cartwright sons.  I was as surprised as they when Ben arrived with the new family member.    This was a tough story to write due to the sustained conversation between the three sons.  But you did it well, and the story moved along quickly.

Author's Response:

Thank you, Elizabeth, your review is appreciated both here and in the forum.

I did wonder had I included too much dialogue and to be honest sometimes I don't know when to stop.  I start on a conversation between the brothers and it could lead anywhere.  I kind of felt on the sustained wait for their father tempers would shorten.

Glad that you 'loved' the story - that is such an encouraging remark.

Date: 04/23/2019 - 08:21 pm [Report This]
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