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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Tahoe Lee Signed

Lovely family story. 

Great dialog especially for Marie.  

You created a clear picture of her.  She was a good mother to all of them. 

Love the brothers realationship with each other and how their distinct personalities were being formed and developed. 

Well done!                               

Date: 10/24/2018 - 07:49 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: RedShirt Signed

I like this. It's a nice snapshot of a day in the life of a family on the frontier, complete with the kind of pitfall that most authors wouldn't think of.

I'm a little concerned with Marie's determination not to let anyone have enough detail of an event to be fully cognizant of its seriousness. Perhaps that's her parenting style; maybe that's how she herself grew up. Don't know, but would like to have some idea why she's so determined that no one discuss 'unpleasantness' with her. She's not a city girl without a clue about the reasons one talks over hazards and figures out solutions.

Shorty's a nice character too! (Little bit deus-ex-machina, but then again, you need one there, and he doesn't really effect the denouement all by himself.) I like his style: one the boy can't fall through ... unless he fixes a lid too heavy for Joe to lift on the other, that'll be quite a feat!

Good clean grammar, nice pacing, well thought-out characterizations for all the players on the stage. Kudos to the author for seeing that imitating his brothers' techniques isn't going to make Joe's writing more legible! 

Well-done!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and commenting, RedShirt. Marie was a city girl from New Orleans. I remember reading an old book on behavior for young ladies that conversations at meals should be pleasant always. It might be banal, but unpleasant things were best not mentioned. Aside frm manners, it helped with digestion.

Date: 08/31/2018 - 07:33 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: littlejoenice Signed

What a silly thing for Joe to have done! I don't think Marie should have punished Joe for wanting to see the book, though. All he wanted to do was see the pictures! A good story, all in all.



Author's Response:

Thank you for taking the time to read it and comment.

Date: 08/07/2018 - 10:11 am [Report This]
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