It was nice to have Christmas in July. I found it difficult to believe tha Ben would have been such a Scrooge but he needed to be for the story. But seeing that he paid Candy $30.00 a week and each son $100.00, the only people with whom he was miserly would be the hands; in the show they received $30.00 a month and "bunk and beans."
One thing I found difficult to accept was the Olsons in Virginia City but it's your story and you have a right to put them in. Also, I can't see Ben, no matter if he changed his ways or not, not leaving the Ponderosa or money to his sons in his will. But the story does require some hyperbole to fit the format of "A Christmas Carol." And Joe does make a perfect "Tiny Tim," since Clementine Hawkins thought that was his name anyway. : )
Just a format note: double-spacing makes it easier to read. I lost a few lines and had to run my finger under them.
Thanks for reading! Very glad you enjoyed it. As for the note about the Olesons, I figured it would be fun to have them in Virginia City. The format, I know, came out a little bit crazy. Will do better with my next story. All in all, I'm thrilled that you liked it.