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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Sierras Signed

A powerful and riveting story that shows Adam's progress toward healing and shows the bonds of the Cartwrights.  A very good followup to "The Crucible".



Author's Response:

Thank you, Sierras.  I always thought Adam would need some time, as well as a pathway to healing, after such life-changing interactions with a man like Kane.  The love of his father and brothers pulled him through which was the point of the story for me.  I'm happy to hear you had the same impressions from reading it.  The Crucible is a tough act to follow.  :)   

Date: 07/22/2018 - 04:27 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Tahoe Lee Signed

Amazing story.  Very well written.  Two parts leap out at me as exceptional.  The scene with Adam and Joe in the woods.  Wow!  Your dialog and how it escalates was so real.  I could picture Michael and Pernell acting all that out.  And the ending was pitch perfect!!



Author's Response:

Thank you my dear.  I know this was a challenging piece to write.  (Insert face plant here.)  What began as a short prompt morphed into something larger and admittedly unexpected.  I made a few adjustments to my original thinking and the story is what I came up with.  I've noticed some folks don't believe Joe was capable of getting tough with his oldest brother.  I tend to think that in adulthood Joe could handle anything Adam could dish out.  Joe was also motivated from the standpoint of love and nothing less.  Few other people understood Adam as well as Joe did.  And ya know - it would be amazing to benefit from Michael and Pernell's acting skills in many scenes we'd all like to see.  I've no doubt they would do justice to whatever they tackled.  Hummm...  What a nice dream.  :)          

Date: 06/06/2018 - 06:17 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: pegasus Signed

Very nice take on the aftermath of The Crucible, Sharry! I was blindsided when I discovered Andrea's true motives. I was completely taken in by her, with her wanted posters and documents. Fortunately Adam has more common sense than I do.

It did my heart good to see Adam actually blast that b**tch away! Those Cartwrights are often way too polite and would generally hesitate before shooting a woman.

Way to go, Adam! (And very well written, Sharry!)



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your input, Pegasus.  I confess I was a bit blindsided by Andrea myself.  I didn't know exactly where the story was going until I felt like finishing it.  These things are usually a complete surprise to me as much as anyone else. 

Adam might be a total gentleman, but he is not a fool.  While I don't think he expected to see anyone stoop as low as Andrea did, he was capable of taking her out if the situation demanded it.  That's my man!  Both Peter and Andrea Kane met their match the day either of them met Adam Cartwright.  All things considered, I thought it was fair Adam had the last shot.  I agree - way to go, Adam!  :)

 

  

  


Date: 09/24/2016 - 05:48 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Pt29646 Signed

I love the painting by Bierstadt. It was wonderful the way you included it in your ending. 

Andrea was a great character. As twisted as her father, she presented a new challenge to the whole family. Also, I really liked interaction between Adam and Joe. On the show, Ben, Adam, or Hoss were the ones who got LJ out of scrape, but you allowed Joe to support Adam through a difficult recovery. 

I thought it was realistic, too, the way you had Adam facing a diffcult recovery from his ordeal. IMO, no one with any depth of feeling could just bounce back from almost two weeks of torture. 

The Crucible is one of my favorite episodes, but I've never tried to write a WHN although I usually enjoy reading them. Your story is one of the best. Thank you for posting. 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much, Pt!  I'm sorry I've been out of town for about ten days - away from my computer, and generally out of touch with multiple things.  I'm delighted you found something you liked in this story.  The Bierstadt painting was begging to be included.  It felt right to me as well.      

I suspect you and I may share similar opinions about the relationship between Adam and Joe.  Although Joe is typically the one who needs to be rescued, I believe he can also be the rescuer if he needs to be.  The last thing Joe would do if he saw anyone he loved hurting would be to leave them alone.  It would be too painful for him to watch.  Most likely it would also make him angry until he could figure out what to do first and/or next.  

I also believe an experience like the one Adam had with Peter Kane would require a recovery period of some sort.  The Adam I picture in my mind is stronger and more disciplined than most men, but he would still have a breaking point.  Adam stood up to Kane until the bitter end, cracking only when he felt safe with his father.  I believe a reflection of the same sort of strength - in this case from Joe - would be the only thing that could help him heal.  The shock of witnessing his father's assault was the catalyst, but Joe had been hammering away at him up until that moment.  He was ready to go full circle, so to speak, and get well.        

The Crucible is also one of my favorite episodes.  It was daunting to attempt to write a WHN, athough I do enjoy reading them as well, I had certainly not attempted to write one previously.  Quite frankly, I'm unsure if I will try something like that again or not.  :)  

Thank you again for your kind words.  It does help to make it all worthwhile.  :)

Date: 07/22/2016 - 03:15 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: adamant Signed

An interesting story about revenge. Initially, the reader is led to think one thing but then a twist is revealed and the story follows anothr track. Tere are many stories about Adam after the incident in "The Crucible" and different writers have Adam suffer/recover in different ways. In tis one, Adam is reminded that life didn't stop after his time slaving for Kane and that life and struggles and possible threats stll exist and it is necessary to move on. The author leaves Adam no choice but to do so.



Author's Response:

 

It was a big twist, wasn't it?  I appreciate your interpretation of Adam's recovery - meaning life goes forward no matter how he feels, and he needs to catch up.  Something unexpected forced Adam to become more aggressive in his own situation. When the choices were clear he made the right decisions.  I had confidence in him.  Thank you for your comments.    :)

 

 

Date: 07/08/2016 - 02:14 pm [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Tracy Signed

I've always wished for a second part to the episode, "The Crucible." To put a main character through the torture Adam suffered at kane's hands would surely affect the character even after the ordeal. I appreciate all stories dealing with the aftermath of this episode. Having an original character and her actions be the salve that started Adam's healing - even though she inherited her father's insanity - is a very unique twist to the continuation I've always wanted.

 

Well done, Sharry. I enjoyed this story.



Author's Response:

I always longed for a second part to the The Crucible myself.  Although the episode was among the best, it left most of us with many questions.  I agree Adam woud have been forever affected by the events he suffered at the hands of Kane.  The episode itself demonstrated that in the end when Adam allowed himself to collapse in the safety of his father's arms.  

I don't think Adam would have necessarily been forever handicapped by the experience.  I do think he would have taken his own path toward healing.  I also think his family would have been at the crux of his success.  

Thank you for your kind comments, Tracy.  It's gratifying to know you enjoyed the story.     

Date: 07/08/2016 - 09:02 am [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Bertha Signed

Very good story. Interesting twist. Thanks



Author's Response:

Thank you, Bertha.  It was something of a twist, wasn't it?  It's alwas nice to hear from you.  :)

Date: 06/27/2016 - 11:00 pm [Report This]
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