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Title: The Better Man Reviewer: CowgirlAtHeart Signed

Great story! I like the idea of young Adam and young Will meeting each other.  I also really like how the story is told using young Adam's narrative voice!



Author's Response:

Thank you. I tried to imagine how a ten-year-old but might talk who had spent so much time alone. Thanks for the review.

Date: 10/06/2017 - 09:50 pm [Report This]
Title: The Better Man Reviewer: Fanofoldtvshows Signed

A wonderful story. Really enjoyed it.



Author's Response:

Thank you. : )

Date: 08/26/2015 - 02:28 pm [Report This]
Title: The Better Man Reviewer: ljlover2001 Signed

A sweet little story. I certainly didn't like young Will and felt that Adam was justified in fighting with him, even if Ben didn't approve. I suspect that there was a certain amount of rivalry between Ben and John, as they were growing up and it had continued into adulthood. 



Author's Response:

First, thank you, ljlover2001, for reading and taking the time to comment. I also think there may have been a bit of rivalry between Ben and John since their histories--at least up to that point--were similar (accordin to canon as well.) I also felt that Will & Adam would have a rivalry that carried over to adulthood.  Like fathers, like sons.

Date: 06/16/2015 - 04:49 pm [Report This]
Title: The Better Man Reviewer: Calamity Signed

Touching. I like the idea of Ben having a brother that he could visit. I often wondered why more of his family didn't join him on the Ponderosa. I know that this brother eventually passes, but he's close enough to give Ben a hug. I like that. Poor Adam was expecting to have relatives that he could like and instead he got Will. Sometimes life just isn't fair.

I especially like how you amplified Adam's character in his actions using the beetle. Your word selections for the young man also show how much time he spent alone reading while his single parent father worked a long day. Back then there was not such a thing as a forty-hour work week.

I think that Will must have been as difficult a child as a boy might be and you characterized him perfectly. After losing his wife, John might not see a fault in his boy during his mourning.

Thanks for sharing this tribute.



Author's Response:

Thank you for the thoughtful and inisghtful review. I always thought that Adam and Will were more alike than most people think--their basic upbringing seems to have been similar--two young boys of about the same age and their fathers--no mothers and the lack of a mother always (at least according to psychoanalysts,) causes issues. Nevertheless, my impression was thatt John was always looking for a get-rich-quick solution while Ben persevered; this influence seems to have made Will a wanderer alays looking for something better over the next hill.

 

I appreciate your comments on the short section with the beetle--Will threw a rock at the dog--basically, just for something to do--but Adam was benevolent to a mere beetle, reining in his power. 

 

Thanks for reading and commenting.

Date: 06/11/2015 - 12:35 am [Report This]
Title: The Better Man Reviewer: Bertha Signed

Very good, thanks



Author's Response:

Thank you for taking the time to read.

Date: 06/07/2015 - 11:15 am [Report This]
Title: The Better Man Reviewer: Tracy Signed

The Better Man reveals bits and pieces of Adam's childhood and explores the father/son relationship that shaped the Adam Cartwright we saw on the series.

I recommend this touching account told from a young boy whose life was never easy, but always filled with love.



Author's Response:

A generous review, Tracy. Thank you. I tried to imitate the style of a small boy so there's no poetic language, etc., no metaphors.  

Date: 06/02/2015 - 11:52 pm [Report This]
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